Oink,Oink,Oink,Oink the 3 lazy pigs got out of bed and went downstairs to have Porridge with toast, after eating the 3 lazy pigs decided to go for a walk. Suddenly they saw a strange house that they have never saw when they go for a walk knock,knock as they door opened with a squeaky noise there they saw a wolf with it’s wife and children. “Grrrrr as the wolf get angry and starts to walk slowly towards the pigs. The 3 little pigs ran as fast as they could their legs were aching and their lungs are screeching, they ran through the door and slammed the door.
So the wolf huffed and puffed and blew there house away ahhh the 3 little pigs screamed. So they ran to find a place where the wolf wouldn't find them. Later on that day they arrived to a place called Pigsaville the place of the mud. The wolf saw where they were going so he pretended to be a pig by dressing up as a pig so he can eat the 3 little pigs. As soon as he got there he couldn't see them, the 3 little pigs where at his house trying to kill his children and his wife.
At 3.00pm the wolf arrived to his house and saw no one there because every time when he comes from somewhere or to go and find some food they will always come out and hug him. As he got in the house he saw his family shot and killed. The 3 pigs said to the wolf “ If you blow down or house again or touch us we will kill you too and eat your family. So the wolf ran away but the 3 pigs laughed because his family wasn't dead they pretended to be dead to teach him a lesson to not go and scare little kids like that. Then they lived happily ever after The End.
I like your twists in this story Raeleen. Several times I thought that I knew where you were going with it then I was surprised because something different happened. That's what authors do, they try to keep their reader interested and wondering what's going to happen next. Well done.
ReplyDeletePerhaps you could have a proofread of it though. I think you could make it even better by adding in a few fullstops where it needs them.